Write a persuasive piece: should students have a longer lunch break?
Write a persuasive piece: should students have a longer lunch break?
Lunch should be longer because it is good for us. Students would like it. It would be better for everyone.
A longer lunch would give students time to eat properly and still play. Right now, many of us gulp our sandwiches in five minutes so we don't miss the handball game, then sit through maths with sore stomachs. Ten more minutes would fix that.
"before"给出的三个理由其实是同一个模糊的理由："it is good"。"after"只选一个具体的理由，并用任何读者都能想象到的细节来支撑。把一个理由讲透，胜过只点出三个理由。
讲解示例 2
Write a story about something that goes missing.
Write a story about something that goes missing.
Leah lost her library book. She looked everywhere for it. She was very sad. Then she found it under her brother's pillow and she was happy.
The library book had been missing for a week when Leah finally found it, tucked under her little brother's pillow. He couldn't read most of the words yet. But between the pages, he had tucked his own wobbly pencil drawings to go with the story.
Is it better to be good at one thing or good at many things?
Is it better to be good at one thing or good at many things?
I think it is better to be good at many things because then you can do lots of things. If you are only good at one thing you can only do one thing. Being good at many things is better.
Being good at many things sounds better, but I think the answer depends on what you mean by "good". My cousin Hamish plays four sports and enjoys them all, but he has never quite made a team. My friend Zara only swims, and she swims at state level. Maybe the best plan is to try many things while you're young, then let one of them pull you in.
